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WIP 1 - [link]
My second WIP of Hricxs vs Mixas.

Concrit will make me love you, but please read what I've written <3

Please don't comment on...
-Mixas' forward leg, specifically the knee.
-Mixas' nose. I didn't rub out enough of the previous sketch, so it's kinda...blobby-looking.
-Mixas' disappearing coat XD

Please DO comment on...
-The ice fist (will be adding detail to it later))
-The general shape of Mixas' head, specifically the brow (never tried drawing them before ^.^; do it looks kinda weird)
-Mixas' facial expression

Other notes...
-Gave them proper lips XD
-I've muscled them both up now, although not too much as Hricxs is pretty skinny
-Made both parts of their legs the same length XD no stupidly long thighs now!
-Increased the size of Hricxs' hands
-Improved Hricxs' facial expression

Hopefully this picture is coming across as...
Mixas: Oh SHIT D-:
Hricxs: The tables have turned! >:-D

Slight update to the story...
Hricxs steals Mixas' mallet after the battle XD I'm presuming that the Organization's weapons are kept in some sort of alternate dimension/virtual cupboard/whatever when not in use, and that's where they're materilized from. I'm also presuming that if the weapons aren't in that dimension-cupboard, they cannot be retrieved...XD so Hricxs will have some blackmail over Mixas for a while.

Organization XIII and inspiration (C) Squeenix and Disney
Organization IX and characters (C) Me

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:icondalek300:
Nice second version :D I like the ice fist there, nice addition and good clenched position too. The addition of expressions is also a nice touch, we can actually see the "Oh fuck" expression on Mixas' face now and Hricxs totally looks set on battling. Also lookin around, everything's looking great, especially Mixas' boots, which I never noticed before. After reading the concrit that Lenguin left on the first version, it looks like you've paid good attention to what was said which looks great as a result :D

The only improvements I believe I could put forward is perhaps make the mallet's head larger. Not completely sure by how much but havin' it larger may make it look more intimidating :D Also, for Hricxs' ice powers, perhaps not have it coming physically out of his hand because it looks attached. Maybe have it form away from his hand, not a huge amount but slightly.

Sides from that, AWESOME picture with a kick-ass backstory, now we just need some battle music and we're set. If you like I can help a lil' tomorrow at my house with some drawing? Don't have to but it's an offer XD Anyways, nice job!

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:iconsammiebookworm:
D'aw, thanks for your comment of doom X3 I <3 comments of doom!

"Oh fuck", as you so eloquently put it, is the espression I was going for, so I'm glad that worked out X3 making Charlie bigger sounds good, I'll try that out. As for not having it coming straight from his hand, the idea was that he keeps feeding the ice, if you will, so that even when it begins to shatter it regenerates. I'll give what you suggested a go though.

When I come round tomorrow I'll bring it with me X3

YAY BATTLE MUSIC!

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I have far too many ideas, and I procrastinate. A fatal combination.

Your mum...is a nice lady. You, however...*insert insult here*

"You're such a fag!"
"Stop being such a tampon!"
"Stop being such a USED tampon!"
:-o "You go too far!"
:icondalek300:
:D The only reason I suggest having the ice away from his hand is that I'm too used to the idea of having someone who makes ice by using moisture in the air around them. Examples are Frozone from The Incredibles and I think that Iceman in X-Men is also the same. The ideas just in my head from stuff like that.

Awesome that you're bringing it :D I can show a few tricks XD And then you can scan it so we have a REALLY good copy of it :D

As for battle music, thinking something really heavily possibly with an acoustic piece during it though for a slight moment of calm before the battle rages on :D

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~Serj-Tankian Serj Tankian Club
~SystemOfADown System Of A Down Club

I LOVE EMMA FOREVER AND EVER!
:iconsammiebookworm:
Ah, he doesn't use the moisture around him XD his own energy creates the ice. nvm though.

I have something similar in my mind, only heavy for most of it, with a sort of slowmotion bit in the moment in which this picture occurs, and then something slightly slower and more final, to show that the battle has been won.

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I have far too many ideas, and I procrastinate. A fatal combination.

Your mum...is a nice lady. You, however...*insert insult here*

"You're such a fag!"
"Stop being such a tampon!"
"Stop being such a USED tampon!"
:-o "You go too far!"
:icondomina-ferrum:
You know what would be REALLY awesome? If Hricxs, even in his disadvantageous position, was mocking you with an ice mallet, just to say like "haha, is that all you've got?"

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Fluff is good!
:iconsammiebookworm:
lol X3 it'd be awesome if it worked from that position, actually XD I might use it in another battle scene.

Though, that has inspired me to do summit else XD *hugs* Thanks Varia!

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I have far too many ideas, and I procrastinate. A fatal combination.

Your mum...is a nice lady. You, however...*insert insult here*

"You're such a fag!"
"Stop being such a tampon!"
"Stop being such a USED tampon!"
:-o "You go too far!"
:iconfloofsam:
Thats what i was saying, im used to it forming away from them, however, if your using a fist idea, rather then it coming out of the hands palm, why not have him having a clenched fist, and it coming from say, the wrist? so it just looks as if its extending into a huge ice fist, it wouldn't look brilliant draw, but colored i reckon it could look cool. I'll show you what i mean in school tomorrow if you want

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Ohya.
:iconsammiebookworm:
Oooh, that's a great idea! Thanks Sam! And yes to your offer as well *hugs*

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I have far too many ideas, and I procrastinate. A fatal combination.

Your mum...is a nice lady. You, however...*insert insult here*

"You're such a fag!"
"Stop being such a tampon!"
"Stop being such a USED tampon!"
:-o "You go too far!"
:icondalek300:
That sounds awesome :D Slipknot may be a must XD

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~Serj-Tankian Serj Tankian Club
~SystemOfADown System Of A Down Club

I LOVE EMMA FOREVER AND EVER!

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